DESERT KID VISITS THE BEACH
KiKi is a desert kid. In the desert the sun shines almost every day.
It gets really hot. Sometimes it's too hot to go outside and play.
KiKi likes to ride her bike. She rides with her Daddy when it's not too hot
It's dry and they get thirsty. They drink from their water bottles a lot.
KiKi goes swimming in the pool. Sometimes she just floats when she feels lazy.
Mostly she swims and goes under water . She opens her eyes and sees Mommy's legs are hazy.
KiKi likes the Saguaro cactus. There are lots and they are taller than most of the trees.
The cactus grow arms. They grow in ones, or twos, or sometimes fours and threes.
KiKi goes to Grandma and Grandpa's. They live far away by the beach.
The ocean is really big. It goes so much farther than she can see or reach.
KiKi and Grandma go to the water. You must be really careful KiKi is told
The waves can knock girls down. She doesn't wade long, the water is too cold.
KiKi looks for sea creatures. She watches seals and sea lions resting on rocks and in caves.
They eat lots of fish. They catch fish by shore and sometimes beyond the waves
KiKi likes to play in the sand the best. She can dig holes, build dams, and make sand cakes.
Grandma helps her build a sandcastle. With just a shovel and a pail that's all that it takes.
KiKi sleeps with a warm quilt. Mornings are cold and she cuddles with Grandpa real cozy
One morning there is no sun. It's like she is swimming under water and it looks fuzzy.
KiKi asks what's going on. It's like she can breathe underwater and everything is soggy.
Grandpa says it's the cool ocean weather. Lots of mornings the sun is covered and it's foggy.
KiKi walks in the redwood forest. Grandma says some of the trees are almost 300 feet tall.
They have to look up high. KiKi lays on her back to see the tree trunk, branches, top and all.
KiKi has to go home soon. She loves visiting her grandparents at the beach and is sad to go.
But, KiKi is a desert kid. She likes to be warm and watch the cactus fade in the sunset glow.
This is my current project. It is for kids about 3-6.
'You must be really careful KiKi is told. The waves can knock girls down."
ReplyDeleteI found these two sentences very evocative...This is a lovely piece of writing...It seems to written with pictures or drawings in mind...I wish in the beginning there was a little more physical description or something of Kiki...And, to go out on a limb, it almost seemed like there are two stories here...I was much more interested in the visit to the beach part, the grandparents and all...The desert part, home for KiKi didn't come through as vividly...Could the story be just about the girl's visit to the beach without contrasting it to her desert life...I am probably way off on this...We can all talk about it in class/writers group tomorrow...